dverse MTB: Imagism revisited Posted by Frank J. Tassone
Time stretches like a rubber band
taut, tauter, tautest
my nerves fray fry flicker
like ice dancing on a hot griddle
I pace, jump up, pace, sit stone still
blend with the second hand, circle
to a place where the waiting is done
where the news is known
where I can fall apart or
begin to breathe again.
Such vivid writing and tension encapsulated in imagery like ‘ice dancing on a hot griddle’
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Thanks Laura
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I agree with Laura; that is quite vivid.
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Thank you
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Not easy to weave a full emotion. I like the relief that is coming one way or another.
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You incarnage the anxiety of waiting so well! Wonderfully done!
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Thank you, Frank
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Intense!
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…hope it was good news!
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Still waiting but there is a little more hope now.
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kaykuala
Time stretches like a rubber band
taut, tauter, tautest
my nerves fray fry flicker
Great opening with the added imagery so realistically done, debi!
Hank
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Waiting and anticipation are often worse than the news. I hope it’s good 🙂
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Thank you
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I love the description of time as a rubber band, Debi, the way you stretched it using ‘taut, tauter, tautest’, the movement of time in ‘circle to a place where the waiting is done’, and the release in the final lines.
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Thank you, Kim
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Your images of the taut rubber band and the ice dancing on the hot griddle are such good example of frayed nerves!
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Thank you
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You are welcome!
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This like a palpable anticipation.
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Thanks
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The narrator is wound like a clock! The anxiety well conveyed.
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Thank you
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The staccato of waiting. The rhythm is just right. (K)
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Thanks Hank
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“ice dancing on a hot griddle” – So much to see in this poem, Debi. Hope good news follows.
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Thanks, Sara, my newest grandson (9 months) has been sick with a high fever -104 for a couple of days and it wouldn’t go down. They tested for covid and thankfully it was neg. but the they noticed he wasn’t responding to sound so that scared us. Today he is responding to some so it might just be fluid. We’ll know more in a few days but it looks so much better than it did.
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Sending my good thoughts to you, Debi. I hope he is feeling better soon.
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